My character description

he nearly cried.

he wished he could have some friends and not feeling left out in the rain all alone. he is in some dull and dark clothes with his leg up to his chest. no one is talking to him or around him.

he is having the bad day because he have no friends.
he was scraping with his back on the wall

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2 thoughts on “My character description”

  1. you are showing not telling by the words you have used like,he was scraping with his back on the wall and he is in some dull and dark clothes with his leg up to his chest.

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  2. Don’t forget to always check your posts for Capital letters and full stops. Punctuation is a non-negotiable in Year 6 Anya.
    If you took out all the he is and he was would it be less tell and more show?

    Wishing he had some friends and not feeling left out in the rain all alone in some dull and dark clothes with his leg up to his chest. no one is talking to him or around him.

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