See if you can use the descriptive language devices you have been learning for these people – choose one to write your post about – but don’t say which – your reader should be able to work out which one you are ‘describing’ – remember to show not tell ….
Leaning his head on his knees, worn out shoes and ripped clothing. Bullys ran past the lights with laughter and shouting.there were tears going down his red cheeks it was like two rainfalls. he was in a dark hallway and worried to see what would happen next.He heard rats crawling through the hall.He stayed in the hallway because he was petrified of the bullys and stayed there for hours
he nearly cried.
he wished he could have some friends and not feeling left out in the rain all alone. he is in some dull and dark clothes with his leg up to his chest. no one is talking to him or around him.
he is having the bad day because he have no friends.
he was scraping with his back on the wall
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